If that’s alright with you?

Poem: If that’s alright with you?

‘Giss a kiss’ he says he would say

The right chat up line to gain her attention

He won’t forget to mention and say it out loud

I’ve got a yacht

and a home in the country

Well 2 or 3

I’m a billionaire you see

I know you don’t care for material things

The chunky jewellery that shines, twinkles and blings

If you fancy me

The way I fancy you

Let’s go to a nice cafe

Have a sarnie and a delicious brew

It’s good for me

If that’s alright with you?

 

Review: If that’s alright with you?

Ok poet, I am imagining this poem being said to me.  Already, I’m reeled in with the polite sounding title.

’If that’s alright with you?’ 

Is what alright with me poet?

I soon find out. Whoa!

The first line of the poem is where I find the answer.

It’s bold! That’s for sure. I’ll try not to blush (if that’s at all possible?)

By going straight in with saying ‘giss a kiss’ sure is vivid and demanding. The poet doesn’t appear to be talking about themselves here but of a chap who hasn’t said it yet, has he? But he would say it. He does find the woman attractive and wants her attention. Well, he’s right not to be saying it to start with, (First impressions and all that!) I would turn around, walk straight past, not make any eye contact. I would imagine it would not do the trick in being a successful chat up line. I would not be wooed nor charmed.

Where does he go next? What does he say?

He’s got a yacht

More than one Country home

He’s a billionaire

Hang on a second. No – one in their right mind would spout these words, would they? He changes his tune to that of understanding that the person he likes is not impressed by material things. He’s clearly testing the water here to see what impresses her.

Simply he finds her attractive and would like to get to know her. If she’s interested in going to a café to have a cuppa, some lunch and conversation no doubt?

Good move! He wants to get to know her. That’ll do it for me! Always up for conversation and making friends is a great start. If a relationship of a more serious nature was to occur or come from it with a bit of a ‘phwoar factor’ then that will happen organically. Little acorns, eh? Little acorns

I’m loving the rhymes of ‘giss and kiss’ ‘got and yacht’

and other rhymes through-out the poem have carried me, the reader, with charm from one line to the next.

An engaging little read. It has got my attention and that is alright with me.